vox nihili

I really liked the imagery this poem conjured. Very vivid. However, some of it was kind of confusing, like 'At five I knew who Marilyn Monroe was, the turquoise fifties ...

Me? I really, honestly can't decide. There's something so beautiful in seeing words go down on a page, and there's so much excitement in the scheming; making the characters and ...

I had almost walked out of the radiology unit when I realized: I didn’t have any clean clothes, so I said to Dough, “I don’t-my clothes are dirty.” “I don’t ...

I lay down in my bed(,) (T)trying to put him out of ?him? (my) head(.) It is still a ?puzzel? (puzzle) ?in? (to) me(: ) (W)why did he ?decided turn ...

Kind of disturbing. Not to mention how you attach us to the MC, Marie, and then snatch her away. Very ironic, twisted, etc. Brush up on some of the phrasing. ...

The first part is pretty uh, long, to be frank. (he-he, that's my mc's name...) anyway, but I think it's a pretty unusual plot that I have, so if you're ...

I hope you will enjoy it here. I joined this fall/late summer, and have been addicted to this site since. (wry smile forms on Vox's lips...) Anyhow, welcome! Post, chat, ...

Fay watched out the raindrop splattered window. Should be "Fay watched through the raindrop..." She was looking at her mother as she got into the back of the red jeep ...

I didn't really see any structural abnormalities or mistakes, and the same goes for grammar. The spelling--everything. I would suggest capitalizing each line down, though, and maybe a little variation

I must admit, I didn't read the entire script. What you have going is very interesting, but I do have some tips. one: watch the grammar and (I know this ...

I wrote this in one night when I was on vacation, based on a comment my mom made. I hope you enjoy! :D Feedback welcomed... The Wrong Pocket “Hey, you ...

The nurse’s eyes grew large, round, the whites showing. She made a sort of nervous dance, and raced out my room door. What was going on? There wasn’t much she’d ...

Thanks for reviewing, everybody! Today I went in and started working on a scenario that starts 'way earlier'. It' s a raid by another tribe that results in a conflict ...

Definitely R. also for the er, promiscuious behavior, eh? Work on the spelling. councilor in this context is counselor, and maiden has one d.

I have a prologue sort of piece for a fantasy story. It has ghosts, human sacrifice, and lost souls. Not written to be creepy though. here's the link. :D